Bea

From the diagram ,it can be seen that Europe is the most popular place to travel.There are many beautiful country in there .Such as:Germany,Greece,France ,and the UK.They are very beautiful and have a good culture .The second biggest one is Asis which is approximately 25% . From the data ,it can be concluted that China ,Japan ,Korea and India are really attractive to Western people.Also , Maldives ,Indonesia, and thailand are charming and completely different from the western scenery .Considerably ,15%of those answers wanted to go to Africa next.because in Africa it has the unique culture scenery and local people.Although it might be not as busy as North America,but now people more are and more concerned about the culture .So only 12%,7%selected North America and South America.They have lots of advantages but no too many young people like to travel to there nowadays. Only 5%chose Others ,such as : New Zealand and Australia,they both have beautiful beach and weather .

beastseeksbeauty

well, i am biased, i like Australia and New Zealand. I have traveled through Europe, and found it interesting, but for me Australia has allot to offer, in particular the friendly nature of the people, which is not something you always find in Europe.

be

Thiland needs a capital, third last line from the bottom i think its ment to be 'but not too many...' rather than but no too. sounds fine

beachbum

This needs considerable work, however I would like to point out an error that you make consistently. There is no space between the word and the comma, full stop or punctuation that follows it. When writing a report do not use the % sign; the correct way to write it is "per cent", for example 25 per cent.

bc

From the diagram, it can be seen that Europe is the most popular place for travel. There are many beautiful countries in Europe such as:Germany,Greece,France,and the United Kingdom.These countries are very beautiful and have a very rich culture. The second continent which is a popular place for travel is in Asia, which is approximately 25 percent. From the data, it can be concluded that China,Japan ,Korea, and India are really attractive tourist destinations for Western people. In addition, Maldives,Indonesia, and Thailand are charming and completely different from the western scenery.Considerably,15 percent of those who answered the survey wanted to travel to Africa. The reasoning is because Africa has such a unique culture, scenery, and unique local people. The data showed that out of 12 percent only 7 percent selected North America and South America as a possible tourist destination.The reasonging to this is because these places have many advantages but very little young people like to travel to there nowadays. Lastly, only five percent of those surveyed chose others destinations such as: New Zealand and Australia because they both have beautiful beaches and weather. hope this helps....i am an english major and tried to make as much sense as possible to what you were saying.

be

At the first sentence, after the word "diagram," place your comma next to the word diagram, and then leave a space. In the second sentence, change the word "country" to "countries." Leave a space ater the colon: You are not leaving proper spaces after lots of the words, so go back over it and make those corrections. The word "concluted" should be spelled "concluded."Capitalize the word "Thailand."Not sure what you're trying to say about 15% of those answers wanted to go to Africa.... but maybe you should say 15% of those asked ....and place a comma after next instead of a period.Your next sentence is unclear also.... "Although it might not be as busy as North America, people are more concerned about the culture." might be a better way to get your message across.Drop the word "so" at the beginning of the next sentence. That sentence is also unclear as to what you are saying about 12% and 7%.Say...."but not too many" instead of "no too many"In the last sentence put a period after the word "Australia." Begin a new sentence with "They both have..."Say "beaches" instead of "beach."Say "very few young people," not "very little young people."